Writing Part 1 - Essay
In your English class you have been talking about famous sportspeople. Now your English teacher has asked you to write an essay for homework. Write your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.
Would it be good to be a famous sportsperson?
Notes:- Money
- Private life
- ................(your own idea)
Write your essay in 140-190 words in an appropriate style.
This is a real student's essay that scored 18/20🏅 in the exam 😀
Sample Answer
Would you rather be a famous sportsperson or a "normal" person? If we want to answer this question, first the different topics related to this issue must be evaluated. Firstly, most celebrity sportspeople earn a decent salary which you can put to personal use. Nonetheless, being a high earner makes donating to charities more possible. As a result having a lot of money could be beneficial for both you and others in society.Then again, one consequence of being famous is that other people will likely pry into your private life. The invasion of privacy is something which can drive celebritys crazy, so be careful what you wish for.
Furthermore, another negative aspect of being famous is that you probably miss out on a lot of the free time that you would have if you were not famous. So you might stop practising a hobby due to this.
To sum up, while the salary may be appealing, celebrity sportspeople have to make sacrifices to their private lives and leisure time. In my opinion, I would not enjoy being a famous sportsperson as I believe these consequences would be very stressful.
WHY is this answer good?
Content: 5/5
Content focuses on how well the candidate has completed the different parts of the task, in other words if they have done all they were asked to do.
- Have they included all the points in the question?
- Is everything RELEVANT to the question?
- Is the reader fully INFORMED?
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Communicative Achievement
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- The Communicative Achievement category
focuses on:
- How appropriate the writing is for the task, in this case an essay
- If the candidate has used the appropriate register
- If he or she communicates simple and complex ideas well
- If the essay holds your interest
COMMUNICATIVE ACHIEVEMENT 4/5
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Communicative Achievement
- How appropriate is the writing is for an essay?
- Is the register (tone) appropriate for an essay ?
- Do they communicate simple and complex ideas well?
- Does it hold your interest?
Completion
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ORGANISATION 5/5
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Writing Part 1 - EssayIn your English class you have been talking about the effect of Artifical Intelligence in the future. Now your English teacher has asked you to write an essay for homework. Write your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.
Will AI improve our quality of life?
Notes:
- Jobs
- Education
- ................(your own idea)
Write your essay in 140-190 words in an appropriate style.